"Put them on," the command echoed in the stark room.
She shook her scarlet hair low, refusing to look into the spotlight.
"Now you find the crescendo of their orgasmic duet caustic? Now you can't stand the proof?"
She refused to be grateful for his indelible recording even though she begged him for corroboration.
"Tell you what, my pretty little songbird. I'm turning on the mic. We're recording. I'll come in just like you begged me to as you stripped for me in the spotlight. I'll fulfill every pained delight. But first, put the headphones on..."
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Challenge was to write a flash fiction of 38-98 words
and include the phrase "pained delight" in the piece
Check out Panserbjørne at Insatiabear for links to the other participants!
10 comments:
Wow, you've told quite an involved story in so few words. Lovely piece. :-)
Happy FFF!
I can't believe how much you got into the word count - brilliant.
Resistance is futile, nice tension, putting her at the nexus of the forward movement of the story. Nicely done.
Oh! wicked! ruthless! beautifully done.
It's odd that all the female bloggers interpretation seems to be that the girl is on the receiving end of some male Dom behavior. I always thought these would be a good personality test.
The mix of pain, jealousy and desire in this piece is dizzying. Beautifully crafted and evocative...
You do a great job handling subtext in a very short story. The pain is palpable. Great job.
-Jack
Thanks all! I really squeezed by with one word short of the count :-)
Ryan: what an interesting observation! I think you're onto something about these Flash Fiction telling of our social makeups...
So... let me get this straight... she's listening to her husband who's cheating, but she's about to sleep with the Private Eye she hired, and he's taping it, so he's going to sell it to the husband for a blackmail double-cross? Sounds like an erotic Agatha Christie novel.
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